I don't know if Sparky knows about electric razors.
Friday, December 26, 2014
Happy Christmas, everyone! I hope your holiday and New Year go better than Lillian and Sparky's.
I have a small "storytelling process" story about this page. In the third panel, with the clouds, I originally drew an airplane flying overhead, trailing contrails. I decided at the last second to delete the plane. My original thought: Lillian's so jumpy she's alarmed by a perfectly innocent aircraft that might be mistaken for a flying robot. My final thought: Lillian's so jumpy she's alarmed by nothing at all.
I think it's a subtle but important difference. These are the types of storytelling points I lie awake at night mulling. Sometimes I fear it's a "forest for the trees" situation: "You were sweating a trivial drawing of an airplane while missing an obvious gaping plot/story/character problem?!" But I also think if you sweat the small stuff, it builds up into better big stuff. I dunno. Still learning as I go.
Tuesday, December 16, 2014
EDITED TO ADD: I got some comments from smart readers confused by the action on this page. Consequently, I added some dialog to help explain where Lillian's heading and what she's doing in the first three panels. I think it helps, though I also see some places WAY back in the story where I could clarify the geography of the Inventor's lair a bit. Later . . .
This is a big reason I wanted to put "Last Mechanical Monster" online before doing anything else with it (if it ever amounts to anything else): Crowd-Sourced Editing. If one or two people mention something, it might be their problem. If a whole bunch of people identify the same problem, it's definitely mine. Thanks, editors!